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These days more people put their personal information, such as names, addresses and telephone numbers, online for everyday activities such as socialising on social networks or banking purposes. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, the internet has become common thing in our lives, and people use it in different field, such as scrolling social media, online paying and studying. As a result, here they often share their private information: logins, passwords, g-mails, other important documents. Some say that there is nothing to worry about, while others, including myself, think otherwise.

Firstly, internet is not the best method of saving and using these types of data. There is high risk of getting hacked even without noticing it. It can happen with everybody who use cracked, not official applications and enter their passwords into suspicious websites, especially for juveniles and aged people. This segment of people has highest percentage whose information has been leaked and victims of hackers.

Secondly, teenagers are also in danger of hackers and scammers. Even in the safest types of games such as Roblox or Minecraft, they are not completely safe. In most cases, scammers pretend as a normal player. However, over time they start asking them for the personal data of teenager’s parents: debit cards, photos and documents. Ultimately, due to weak mental and psyche they believe to scammers, who pretend as their friend. It also happens with aged adults. One of the ways how they scam is pretending as a computer fixer. In most cases, people give access them to their personal computer because they think scammers are just fixing it. However, in fact they just steal their money and personal data.

In conclusion, I believe that putting your private data into unknown sites and sharing it in social media is not safe. There are several reasons to not do it, but people still do it.

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