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Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Compete makes you achieve goals. Having competitions is something really important in your daily life, in work, in school, in everywhere you are. It's more effective competing with others than cooperate if you want to be someone in life.

By competing, we start proposing goals to our mind, and daily we want more and more to be closer to that goal. For example, you are in work and you want to be the employe of the month, but for achieving that you must be the greatest in your job, better than the others, so you start watching what does this person is doing that I'm not and what he is it doing that I'm not. After that, you start making this things to achieve that goal of being the employe of the month, until the day arrives and you win it. This, isn't only at work, it can be aplied in whatever you want to achieve like in school, sports, power, etc. Otherwise, is true that working in team you can achieve your goals, because the work is not only of you, you have more people who can help you and distribute the work for having less effort in only one person. This could make that achiving your goals be easier than working alone. But, working in this way is more effective in competitions like team sports. In conclusion, I can say that competing is necessary for living, because if you doesn´t have goals in your life, you can't live, it's imposible to have a life with out a way to walk for reaching a place. Competing makes you that reach that place can be something posible.

Finally competing makes you improve in every of your abilites depending in what for you are competing. Competing is the gratest thing in the world.

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This essay achieved a band score of 6.5. Key strengths include Addresses both views clearly and Provides a clear opinion. Areas for improvement: Some ideas lack depth and Examples could be more detailed.

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