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Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that competition at work, at school, and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other, on my point of view, you should cooperate more, perhaps, only with people with your same objectives that make you improve.

Competition in live, is something that makes you improve, when you are trying to be better than someone, this obligates you to give your best, to achieve your objective, which is, to win against that person, the problem is that your objective must not be to be better that someone, it must be to be better than yourself every day, in that way, you are always going to be improving, because you depend on yourself, not on someone else who is your only motivation to improve. In the other hand, we have people who thinks that we have to cooperate more rather than competing with others, my question to that people is, who are you going to cooperate with? , because is not the same to cooperate with lazy and irresponsible people than being cooperating among people who have your same objectives, if your relationships are full of disorganized and people who does not have clear their own objectives, you are going to become one of them, going backwards instead of improving and advancing in the way to accomplish your dreams in a future, meanwhile, if you are among people with positive energy, and you cooperate with them, not only you are going to improve and reach many objectives, but also, you are going to make others advanced, reaching your dreams, but also helping others to do the same. As a conclusion, in my opinion, the best option is to cooperate, but exclusively with the correct people, being among them, is going to makes you reach your dreams and objectives, making you to be proud of yourself, and having relationships who are going to support you the entire life, always helping you to progress and to be better every day.

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This essay achieved a band score of 6.5. Key strengths include Clear position on cooperation and Discussion of both views. Areas for improvement: General examples and Some ideas could be more developed.

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